1.First body paragraph- count how many words in each sentence. Are they about the same length? If so, you probably don’t have enough sentence variety. How can you revise it to make more interesting for your reader?

2.Word choice- check for words like “good”, “bad”, “things”, and “stuff”. These are very vague. Highlight each instance of vague wording. Then you need to replace those words with clearer choices.

3.Colon/Semi-colon – did you use one correctly?

4. Did you stay 3rd person throughout?